Surabaya is my hometown. It’s capital city of East Java. And Surabaya famous enough in Indonesia after Jakarta. My hometown popular with name heroes city. About many years ago ever happen war in Surabaya. And it has been devour many victims in Surabaya. Struggle Surabaya people so persistent. When Dutch set their flag with red, white, blue colour in a hotel. But, and then Surabaya people try to detach blue colour. And set flag again only with red and white colour. And then our heroes feel happy, because can uncase our nationality flag. I proud with our heroes, struggle for our city and our state.
About nine teen years ago, I was born in Surabaya. It’s my lovely city. Surabaya has many tourism object. For example zoo in Surabaya. Usually every holiday and Saturday, Sunday there are crowded. I think zoo so famous in Surabaya. Villager come to Surabaya just to visit zoo. There are we can find many animals like tiger, monkey, crocodile, elephant etc. When I was five years old, I and my parents visit zoo. I feel happy and really enjoy it. I hope someday it can be one of tourism object well known in Indonesia.
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hello friend................
- After I read your blog, your description about your hometown actually enough good, you tell historical of Surabaya, and you also tell about tourism object.
- there are little your description about your self for example "about nine teen years ago, I was born in Surabaya". I think you don't tell about it because your topic sentence about your hometown.
- do you forget about your title? until didn't view your title in your blog.
-about your grammar, I think your grammar less good and It's still random. It's for me, although I just little to grammar.
By : Yulia Primita Sari
120810494G / Class C
i think your paragraph is good .
but you dont need to describe the historical story about surabaya too much .
where is the interesting place ?
food ?
or many other things that surabaya has ?
so far is good i think .
give me comment too .
you did great on your writing.
but it has 2 topic sentences, the first is about the legend and the second is about tourism object.
your last sentence is wrong arranged.
it should be :
... it can be one of well-known tourism object in Indonesia.
DAMASTI AMANDARA
120810185G
I agree with my friends,..
because I still have many mistakes in my writing, for example my topic sentences, my grammar,.
but, I'll try to make more better again in my writing....
thank you for all my friends...
when I read your first paragraph I was interesting. But why at 2nd paragraph you describe yourself, i don't think so about it.
nadz-hometown.blogspot.com
Your paragraph is good. But,I find a lot of mistake from your paragraph.
you should use and in the middle of the sentence not in the first sentence.
In the first paragraph, you should write : Surabaya is the capital city of east java.
And I think you should change your paragraph, from the structure and conjuction
Comment by : Pratiwi Ramandita 120810487G
so far your paragraph is good but in your paragraph you use two topick,in the first paragraph you tell about heroes city,and the second you tell tourist object.
but is no problem,be creative ok ..
ugh,,
it is so interes,isn't it?!
I Love Surabaya......^^
Candra Septiani Putri
Universitas Surabaya(UBAYA)
Teknik Informatika
2008
chnzpu3.blogspot.com
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